Sitting in a late night café
Cradling coffee and our private tortures
On this hot summer night
Nothing seems right
As I wait for you
To speak.
As we sit by the window,
The world passes by
And the breeze in the trees
Whispers to me.
My heart is on the ground
Swept away with the cigarette butts
I am drowning
On this late summer night.
Sitting in a late night cafe
Coffee untouched and words unsaid
Nothing feels right, and tonight
…I am alone in a crowded room.
(c) 2004
Jyoti
May 17, 2011 at 4:21 pm
very well composed.
Jyoti
May 17, 2011 at 4:23 pm
loved the following lines especially: ‘Cradling coffee and our private tortures’
and
My heart is on the ground
Swept away with the cigarette butts
Life: Between the lines
December 14, 2011 at 6:20 pm
tense silence between the two that says so much yet nothing at all
I know the feeling!
happy rally!!!
http://promisingpoetsparkinglot.blogspot.com/2011/12/agreement-for-thursday-poets-rally-week.html
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 14, 2011 at 9:42 pm
Thank you!
booguloo
December 14, 2011 at 6:25 pm
Private tortures seem to follow us at every turn, especially at night alone in a light night cafe.
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 14, 2011 at 9:42 pm
They do. Thank you for reading.
tinkwelborn
December 14, 2011 at 6:45 pm
Excellent Poem!
you’ve done an excellent job here.
the feelings are embedded as naturally here, as the hues are within it’s beholden flora – perfectly.
the return of sitting is a late night cafe rounding out the poem at the end….and the capstone: alone in a crowded room.
untouched coffee and words unsaid…great symmetry in words.
just a damned good piece.
this is a perfect little poem. good Job!!
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 14, 2011 at 9:41 pm
Oh, thank you very much!
leah J. Lynn
December 14, 2011 at 7:08 pm
Very sad, but nicely written.
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 14, 2011 at 9:41 pm
Thanks!
zongrik
December 14, 2011 at 7:31 pm
sounds lonely
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 14, 2011 at 9:39 pm
It was.
Tino
December 14, 2011 at 8:28 pm
Reading this, Sad Cafe songs kept leaping into my mind
Kind of apt, but not.
Anyway, I enjoyed reading and that loneliness is palpable here.
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 14, 2011 at 9:39 pm
Thank you for reading
thingy
December 14, 2011 at 11:06 pm
Oh, I felt this one. Well done.
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 15, 2011 at 1:12 pm
Thanks very much, thingy
ZQ
December 14, 2011 at 11:20 pm
You are my nomination for this rally’s poetry. Good work!
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 15, 2011 at 1:10 pm
Oh, thank you! *smile*
charlesmashburn
December 15, 2011 at 1:38 am
This is wonderful! I can see the scene very vividly. Very nicely done!
http://charleslmashburn.wordpress.com/2011/12/14/a-thousand-candles/
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 15, 2011 at 1:10 pm
Thank you very much, Charles!
maitreyeechowdhury
December 15, 2011 at 10:58 am
Very nice one..:)
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 15, 2011 at 1:02 pm
Thank you! Cheers for reading.
Kay Salady
December 15, 2011 at 1:14 pm
That’s a good poem!
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 15, 2011 at 1:28 pm
Aw, thank you very much Kay!
Bupinder Singh
December 15, 2011 at 2:45 pm
nice poem,
u need a coffee’
Morning
December 15, 2011 at 5:08 pm
wow.
alone in a crowded room, well done.
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 16, 2011 at 3:16 am
Many thanks, Morning!
Jennifaye
December 15, 2011 at 5:22 pm
I can very much relate to this.
Nice one. You write really well. Now I’m craving for another cup of coffee…
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 16, 2011 at 3:16 am
Have that coffee
Hopefully it won’t be quite as bitter as mine was.
terri0729
December 15, 2011 at 5:37 pm
Yes ma’am, I feel you in this poem! Been there and done that, as I’m sure many have, and it is the worst feeling. Message and emotions jumped off the page at me, very well done indeed!
Blessings, Terri
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 16, 2011 at 3:15 am
Aw, cheers Terri
I always love your comments, they make me smile.
Voyages Vistas Vino
December 15, 2011 at 6:01 pm
Reminds me of a poem I read in Italy this summer…thanks for taking me back there. Well done.
Cheers,
Mark Butkus
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 16, 2011 at 3:15 am
Thanks very much, Mark.
mbwilliams
December 15, 2011 at 7:18 pm
Great poem, the first two lines are absolutely magical
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 16, 2011 at 3:10 am
I really appreciate that, coming from you!
Miriam Sagan
December 16, 2011 at 12:08 am
Strong–caught my interest.
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 16, 2011 at 3:03 am
Thank you very much, Miriam.
Adrian Giannini
December 16, 2011 at 4:03 am
Mmm coffee, nicely spun and liked the tone set
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 16, 2011 at 10:07 am
Cheers for the read and comment!
Nel
December 16, 2011 at 8:09 am
I like how you portray the scene of a cafe and then end with –
Fantastic visual poetry.
Nel
December 16, 2011 at 8:10 am
Oops. The editor bailed on me. My comment should say:
I like how you portray the scene of a cafe and then end with – …I am alone in a crowded room.
Fantastic visual poetry.
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 16, 2011 at 10:07 am
Heh, thank you!
elainedanforth
December 16, 2011 at 8:54 pm
A really vivid picture you paint of the scene and the loneliness. Nicely done.
Caledoniapoems
December 16, 2011 at 10:21 pm
I love this poem – beautiful
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 19, 2011 at 12:49 am
Thank you so much Gillian, I really appreciate it.
Jo Bryant
December 17, 2011 at 9:09 pm
well written poignant poem
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 18, 2011 at 11:48 pm
Aw, cheers Jo
Bodhirose
December 18, 2011 at 1:25 am
I felt the uncomfortable and awkward silence in this…well done, I enjoyed it.
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 18, 2011 at 11:48 pm
Thank you kindly for reading, Bodhirose!
magher1
December 19, 2011 at 12:20 pm
The situation sounds so familiar… Touching!
halfwaybetweenthegutter
December 19, 2011 at 2:22 pm
Thanks for reading