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Pierced to a Platform

25 Jul

A sucker for love
and a hopeless cause
clocks tick slowly
and I am pierced to a platform.

Trapped by ellipses
muddled  by so many words
holes swapped for a soul
and a lamp post
lighting my way.

I am fearful of the dark, now.

(c) 2011

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Posted by on July 25, 2011 in Poetry

 

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26 responses to “Pierced to a Platform

  1. Jingle

    July 29, 2011 at 2:37 am

    haunting, hopeful words.

    love the imagery.
    welcome and happy rally.
    :)

     
    • halfwaybetweenthegutter

      August 8, 2011 at 2:58 am

      Thank you Jingle :) Apologies if I haven’t been able to comment on others poems, I’ve been unwell. I’ll catch up ASAP.

       
  2. jsendslove

    July 29, 2011 at 6:24 am

    Loved this!

     
  3. D

    July 29, 2011 at 2:07 pm

    I love, love this.
    Short yet it evokes powerful emotions.
    When we are trapped we become helpless.
    As Dumbledore said: “Happiness can be found, even in the darkest of times, if one only remembers to turn on the light.”
    :)

     
  4. Fountains

    July 29, 2011 at 4:00 pm

    Such despair. I like the phrase “pierced to a platform” and the idea of being “trapped by an ellipses” as well as the imagery of a lamppost. Very sad and gloomy, and a well written poem.

     
    • halfwaybetweenthegutter

      August 8, 2011 at 3:00 am

      Thank you! I wrote the poem around that phrase. It’s the second I’ve written since 2008, so I’m more than a little rusty, so thanks for the positive comment!

       
  5. CC Champagne

    July 29, 2011 at 9:44 pm

    I was also captured by the ‘pierced to a platform’ bit… Not so sure I think it’s hopeful, but that is just my take on it. *smile* Well written. Loads of angst there!

     
    • halfwaybetweenthegutter

      August 8, 2011 at 3:02 am

      Thanks. Pierced to a platform was a sort of play on myself. I have a lot of body piercings, and sometimes the judgement I receive can be a huge, huge negative. I started wondering if perhaps, by modifying myself, I’ve done damage to how people view me.

       
  6. jennifaye

    July 30, 2011 at 4:00 am

    “Trapped by ellipses muddled by so many words” — Dark and haunting. You captured the despair very creatively.

     
  7. Aaron Smigielski

    July 30, 2011 at 4:12 pm

    “I am fearful of the dark now.” What a way to end on! Excellent write.

     
  8. mindlovemisery

    July 31, 2011 at 10:29 am

    Oh wow intense, powerful imagery!

     
  9. cinnamon blues

    August 1, 2011 at 1:21 pm

    Evocative poem that captured my imagination.

     
  10. Jake Wilcocks

    August 3, 2011 at 4:41 am

    I feel these words in my heart.

     
  11. NAMICOUTURE

    August 4, 2011 at 4:43 am

    The imagery captured and moved me. Great job

     
  12. Ed Williams

    August 5, 2011 at 12:24 pm

    liking your style!

     
  13. purpleborough

    August 5, 2011 at 2:15 pm

    Imagery is piercing through the soul of darkness.

     

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